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Well mannered
« on: September 05, 2012, 01:06:05 AM »
Well mannered
Use the power of politeness!
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #1 on: September 05, 2012, 03:53:41 AM »
Sorry seems so situational that I'm not sure it's worth a full Third Circle ability all on its own. The rest looks pretty well done, and I dig the flavor. Nicely done.
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #2 on: September 05, 2012, 10:07:18 AM »
Sorry seems so situational that I'm not sure it's worth a full Third Circle ability all on its own. The rest looks pretty well done, and I dig the flavor. Nicely done.
I agree, but I was having a hard time coming up with the last few abilities.  Its pretty much inferior to first circle of bag of tricks, and only useful if you are using indiscriminate AoEs. I welcome suggestions for how to rework it.
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #3 on: September 05, 2012, 11:54:45 AM »
You could make it a more general healing ability and call it something like "I'm Sorry to Hear That"?
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #4 on: September 05, 2012, 12:05:38 PM »
You could make it a more general healing ability and call it something like "I'm Sorry to Hear That"?
That is a bit too specific of a phrase, and a bit too direct of an ability for this track. I am going more for quick, basic polite words
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #5 on: September 05, 2012, 01:11:44 PM »
so no "I'm sorry for your loss" for when an ally dies?

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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #6 on: September 05, 2012, 01:50:42 PM »
Please seems a bit open ended to me.  is the intent for the ally to take an action that directly affects you (like casting a buff on you or healing spell etc.) or do you want to allow indirect benefits (like attacking an opponent)?
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #7 on: September 05, 2012, 02:33:10 PM »
Please seems a bit open ended to me.  is the intent for the ally to take an action that directly affects you (like casting a buff on you or healing spell etc.) or do you want to allow indirect benefits (like attacking an opponent)?
It us supposed to directly benefit you.
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #8 on: September 05, 2012, 02:36:29 PM »
Perhaps Sorry could be used to remove negative status effects? Not sure if that's still too direct for this track.
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #9 on: September 05, 2012, 02:43:25 PM »
Perhaps Sorry could be used to remove negative status effects? Not sure if that's still too direct for this track.
I feel like sorry shouln't do anything unless you did something else first. I don't think a general apology fixing things should carry weight
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #10 on: September 05, 2012, 08:58:33 PM »
I've improved it slightly, but I still think its A. weak and B. only useful for a much narrower band of characters than I'd like this track to work for.
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #11 on: September 08, 2012, 06:49:31 AM »
Maybe Sorry could be use an effect that reverser something you've done to an enemy.

I was thinking:
"If you have damaged an opponent with an attack, you may as a move action choose to heal that opponent and yourself for the damage of the attack"

Kinda...

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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #12 on: September 08, 2012, 08:39:33 AM »
'Your welcome' is always an option, but i'm not sure it makes sense except as a follow up to thank you
Sorry could be damage reduction/resistance against one opponent you've harmed this round.
I'm thinking sorry as being a follow up to attacks, either them hurting you less or you hurting them more.

Between that and excuse me, you'd have a tank.

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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #13 on: September 08, 2012, 10:11:40 AM »
I drafted a new ability for sorry. What do you think?
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Re: Well mannered
« Reply #14 on: September 08, 2012, 10:20:19 AM »
Less of a tank, but more thematic. Good choice
I understand that no will save is required, but you may reiterate that for anyone who looks it up.  (at least i assume not, because you're using a 1st circle ability at 3rd circle area)